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You showed me the permanent gift
I gave you on my birthday
The signature of authenticity,
On the sealed doors of my old bedroom.
Hold my hand, vehicle of life
The pleasure is mine
Let me be soothed by your
Porcelain skin one more time
See your hair on my head
Your blood in my veins
Your reflection in mine
And promise me you’ll rest
Tell me you’ll stop
Paving a path for me
Through the thorns
With your naked flesh
Let’s look like a perfect pair
With our set of matching scars
Mine from bearing greed encased in longing
Yours from sacrifice
But my feet were bound in solitude
Yet my hands grasped for your love
Divergent flesh
Torn in sweet escape
All I want is nothing more
Than to see you asleep without furrowed brows
To silence your painful moans
And free the warm colours of your laugh
I want to take off into galaxies that
Shine behind your worn out eyes
And drift to sleep to the pulse
Of the life in your chest
Let my silence tell you
Of how I love you
I gave you on my birthday
The signature of authenticity,
On the sealed doors of my old bedroom.
Hold my hand, vehicle of life
The pleasure is mine
Let me be soothed by your
Porcelain skin one more time
See your hair on my head
Your blood in my veins
Your reflection in mine
And promise me you’ll rest
Tell me you’ll stop
Paving a path for me
Through the thorns
With your naked flesh
Let’s look like a perfect pair
With our set of matching scars
Mine from bearing greed encased in longing
Yours from sacrifice
But my feet were bound in solitude
Yet my hands grasped for your love
Divergent flesh
Torn in sweet escape
All I want is nothing more
Than to see you asleep without furrowed brows
To silence your painful moans
And free the warm colours of your laugh
I want to take off into galaxies that
Shine behind your worn out eyes
And drift to sleep to the pulse
Of the life in your chest
Let my silence tell you
Of how I love you
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![Cherry Pau - pag 23 [translation in description]](https://images-wixmp-ed30a86b8c4ca887773594c2.wixmp.com/f/fc1e2ec5-5f02-43e0-8565-3005f2801b49/d86gzq2-a95055cb-bd4a-4b21-b2a6-a967d54a042b.jpg/v1/crop/w_92,h_92,x_0,y_10,scl_0.055089820359281,q_70,strp/cherry_pau___pag_23__translation_in_description__by_nasuki100_d86gzq2-92s.jpg?token=eyJ0eXAiOiJKV1QiLCJhbGciOiJIUzI1NiJ9.eyJzdWIiOiJ1cm46YXBwOjdlMGQxODg5ODIyNjQzNzNhNWYwZDQxNWVhMGQyNmUwIiwiaXNzIjoidXJuOmFwcDo3ZTBkMTg4OTgyMjY0MzczYTVmMGQ0MTVlYTBkMjZlMCIsIm9iaiI6W1t7ImhlaWdodCI6Ijw9MTQ4MiIsInBhdGgiOiJcL2ZcL2ZjMWUyZWM1LTVmMDItNDNlMC04NTY1LTMwMDVmMjgwMWI0OVwvZDg2Z3pxMi1hOTUwNTVjYi1iZDRhLTRiMjEtYjJhNi1hOTY3ZDU0YTA0MmIuanBnIiwid2lkdGgiOiI8PTEwMjQifV1dLCJhdWQiOlsidXJuOnNlcnZpY2U6aW1hZ2Uub3BlcmF0aW9ucyJdfQ.kDpNHVH5XkKNKBDa4DOeL0dhSa0xdkLBKccoNjBsGaM)
When I began writing I didn't really expect that it would end up this way, and I honestly feel really proud of how it came out.
So here is my try at freeverse!
I hope you guys can tell me in the comments what you feel the meaning of this poem is
It would mean soo much to me!! Thank you so much!
So here is my try at freeverse!
I hope you guys can tell me in the comments what you feel the meaning of this poem is
It would mean soo much to me!! Thank you so much! © 2014 - 2024 Xiaooyu
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You should be proud, it is a very nice poem indeed! 
Hmm, my first impression was sex, but I also found some metaphors about cars as I re-read. The reason I thought of sex is because it reminds me a lot of a part of my novel that I wrote where the main characters, both troubled by their chaotic lives, laid down to 'rest' (
) and the male just wanted to let the female know how much he wanted to ease her troubles. (Did that sentence make sense? xD)
Anyway, well done!
Hmm, my first impression was sex, but I also found some metaphors about cars as I re-read. The reason I thought of sex is because it reminds me a lot of a part of my novel that I wrote where the main characters, both troubled by their chaotic lives, laid down to 'rest' (
) and the male just wanted to let the female know how much he wanted to ease her troubles. (Did that sentence make sense? xD)Anyway, well done!